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I've Been Here Before by =Jedfire:iconJedfire:



I've walked down this crumbled path before,
scanning ahead for stumble pits, tripping
over memory foam, perfectly
enraged
carrying my braining-stick
hoping to encounter some fanged clawed creature
creeping through the stinking underbrush
hunting its own murder-meat-
I'll sneak up behind it, and...

I've beat down this sinking mood before,
swimming against the tilt-a-whirlpool, sucking
my sick slick matchstick soul down
the swirling psycho drain, screaming
under boiled blistered witch's-ass sewer waves, grasping
for the slipper-rim, scratching slime from
scummy tiled sides of bowl gasping
gasping going under...

I've flown these lush-laced clouds before,
cotton candied sugar stings, floaty rainbow
symbol-things, bumping into me aloft
like undulating liposucting curly worms
singing churchbell ding dong dings, vibrating shining
silver silly- strings composed in
technicolored blue-whipped windsong misty
rushing warm jellosmack slaps, sticking
to my carved-out conscience, slip-rolled down
furry-felt phantasmagoric fat, slip-spat-thud
smacked into quiverflutter soft-spanked pleasure-mud,
                          !alive!

I've conjured hellstrong thoughtforms,
dipped in mad molassas craven,
grasped the gimballed hexagonic fire-
                         -yes-
-uprooted wiggling crazy-trees, whipped
these shredded bitter roots of butter-dipped desire,
throwing them in slumber pits
there to jiggle-burn for violet eternity-

Yes I have been here before,
writing these black squirrley-sticks
against electric white thought floor
waiting to die again
©2006-2009 =Jedfire
:iconjedfire:

Author's Comments

this pretty much came out of nowhere. strange how that happens.

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:iconangelodeath:
the stuff that comes out of no where seems to usually be the best, i know this from personal exprience.
:iconjedfire:
so did you like this one?

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:iconjedfire:
i'm glad, thank you Angelodeath

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:iconangelodeath:
:) you're most welcome.
:iconcherri13:
I like it..but it kinda confuses me in a way i cant explain explain..it was as if the mood was there but something caught my mind and wouldnt let it go....hmm...couldnt see any errors...so yeah i like it...

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"To tell you the truth, I'm not even that hungry...but when I see those marbles, I just lose it."
:iconmorocco:
exciting diction. every stanza contains the unexpected. the alliteration in "furry-felt phantasmagoric fat, slip-spat-thud
smacked into quiverflutter soft-spanked pleasure-mud,"

helps the reader move through an otherwise dense and difficult section, while the clever wordplay keeps the remainder of the poem crisp and readable.
:iconjedfire:
thanks, Cherri13, it is kind of confusing but o well... :)

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you are welcome to visit my gallery [link]
#Jingulus
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:iconcherri13:
i still liked it hun....:D and i get confused easily lol

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"To tell you the truth, I'm not even that hungry...but when I see those marbles, I just lose it."

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