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A rose-rain vapor blushes hot
Waves of thunder quicken heart-
T'was on purpose, was it not?
Your gaze struck, sweet poison dart...

Clean clear light softens shadowland sadness
Sliding softly sweetly pale;
I would follow through certain madness,
Though I'm sure I would but fail

Questions I would dare not ask
Demand a risk I dare not take;
In this glow I must not bask,
Promises I must not make-

For these illusions end in fire,
Consuming me, with sweet desire...
©2006-2009 =Jedfire
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not a proper sonnet, but not quite improper either

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:icontotouch-theearth:
This is awesome! I can't say which part I like the most, because I love it all.
:icontotouch-theearth:
(Also, I love the alliteration on "Clean clear light softens shadowland sadness" and "Sliding softly sweetly pale" - creates a very cool feel!)
:iconwndz:
love the way you have with words...your use of metaphors and imagery...
beautiful!!!
:iconwriterchick91:
I like the last 2 lines best and I also liked the alliteration. Nice job.

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:iconblackdav666:
good stuff bud!! a bit different for u!

hats off!

Phil :D
:iconjedfire:
thanks, writerchick!

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:iconjedfire:
:blushes: , again ... Thank you, Kim, you're very sweet!

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:iconjedfire:
yes, i'd hoped that would work... thanks!

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:iconjedfire:
thank you so much, Wendy!

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